Saturday 12 April 2014

Story of the Week

Our Story of the Week comes from Tiara, who wrote a sensational recount about our trip to the Maritime Museum last Wednesday.  I was really impressed with her use of paragraphs, as well as some of the interesting language choices she made.  Ka rawe, Tiara!

What a splendid day. That’s what Room 20 and Room 22 had on Wednesday in the blistering heat. We went on a journey in the city at the Maritime Museum it was really cool what we had done was listening to this really nice lady named Karen, Karen took us on alot of tours like riding the boat called Ted Ashby. We all had to wear life jackets because if you don’t have one you might fall into the water and then you wont be able to swim but anyways.
On his boat we gently rowed underneath the harbour bridge if you don’t know what the harbour bridge looks like search it up or go to a town named Auckland city down in New zealand.
(Excellent Fun)
 What i saw was men jumping off the harbour bridge but actually it was called bungy jumping  we were all screaming out to them and saying JUMP JUMP JUMP !!! but they were to shy we all wanted to see some action but we had to move on so we turn around and we went back to the maritime museum. My friend and i had to put something bouncy into the water so we don’t smash in to the big pile of rocks.
It was actually had alot fun going on the boat really enjoyable i cant wait to see some more Enthusiasm stuff during the trip Anyways the next thing we done was going to another boat but this boat is a really special boat it was called Aotearoa 1 i think but we weren’t actually going out on another travel around the sea in Waitemata again.
Karen was talking all about the Aotearoa 1 have learnt alot of information about the treasured stones that they have hidden because they are very special stones and its because they are not aloud to leave the Aotearoa 1 because the boat will die and they will burn into ashes in the Waitemata beach.
The next thing we done was time to have lunch what i had was chicken sandwiches and chips it was really yummy and scrumptious tasty to eat.
(Delicious)
After lunch we all had been given a paper to find these objects in the Mari Time museum we all had to get in a groups and go with a teacher because if we don’t go with a teacher we wont be able to know how to find our way back to our class.
(10 min to find all objects said Karen)
It was really hard to find all the objects in a really big place like the Mari Time Museum.I was like sweating hard out trying to find all the objects but it doesn’t really matter because going around the hole museum was cool.
(Times up)
We all came back to the teachers in the room and then we had to clean up because we were about to leave to go back to school but first the boys did Haka.
Then the girls stand up to thanks Karen for giving us a tour around the hole place.
We all enjoyed having alot of good times.
Thats all fokes thanks for listening to my incredible story Bye.

5 comments:

  1. Kia Ora Tiara

    The descriptive language you have used in your story helps to imagine what it was like to be there, 'blistering heat' , 'reasured stones', 'sweating hard out'.

    Well done

    Matua Dudley

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    1. I loved your story

      By George.

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  2. lovely story.


    by shalin

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  3. Your ideas are well organised Tiara and some great use of interesting language which made me want to read more. Well done!

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  4. Cool story!!! By Tyler From room17

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